词汇语法很好为什么作文分数不高？

最近Nick有机会和以前认识的一位考官寒暄，说起现在考生经常犯的错误，他表示最不能忍的就是大家对于案例的处理。今天和各位聊一聊有哪些不应该做的事情，希望能帮助到大家：

错误1: 过于繁琐或细节太多的案例

降分幅度：轻度

Bad example: I have a friend who is a teacher. He was born and raised in China and he was well educated. When he was a student in high school, he was the top student and usually won the top position in mark-ranking every semester. After he graduated, he becomes a very successful man who found job very easily.

点评：这个朋友的内容介绍也实在太啰嗦了！

good example: A friend of mine who was well educated in high school is a perfect instance to prove how important the knowledge is to a person’s job finding because he was successfully employed after graduation.

错误2: 明显造假的案例

降分幅度：明显

bad example: People in the world all know that Olympic games are held in developed countries and some reports published in Oxford University’s academic study even say that only rich countries are able to organize successful sport events.

点评：明显不符合事实啊，2008年的奥运会就是在一个发展中国家办的！而且你怎么就这么牛，能记得住牛津大学的学术报告呢？

good example: There are some evidences to show that sport events are better organized in some rich countries because of their economic support.

错误3: 没有在案例中展示出核心论点的

降分幅度：较大

bad example: I have a friend who is very well educated and he found a job after graduation.

点评：核心证明的论点一定要在例子中体现，不然考官无法理解这件事情是怎么发生的！

good example: A friend of mine who was well educated in high school is a perfect instance to prove how important the knowledge is to a person’s job finding because he was successfully employed after graduation. （其实就是第一个题目的例子）

错误4: 涉及敏感话题或不适当在雅思考试中出现的案例

降分幅度啊：很大

bad example: Donald Trump, as we all know, is a terrible president and he usually made some ridiculous mistakes during his speech.

点评：这是明显的看热闹不嫌事大。你怎么知道考官会不会欣赏你的想法？

good example: Some national leaders who made mistakes in their speeches might not have full support from their people.

错误5: 完全不符合论点的案例。

降分幅度：巨大 （这里需要整段表述）

Bad example: Using internet is an efficient way to study comparing with reading paper-made book because it saves a great deal of time. For instance, the students in universities with free wifi usually have better graduation rate than those only with libraries.

点评：明明是要证明用电脑是省时间的，怎么到例子里就变成了毕业率更高了？？这都是考官眼里非常严重的错误，可能会导致内容和逻辑的双重扣分。

Good example: Using internet is an efficient way to study comparing with reading paper-made book because it saves a great deal of time. For instance, the students in universities with free wifi usually have more time to participate more activities than those only with libraries.

-- Nick Yang

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